I offer editorial critiques for aspiring authors of any age. I work best with Young Adult and Middle Grade fiction, but I’m open to other genres.
I focus on developing plot, pacing, character, dialogue and world-building, analysing the work in preparation for submission to a literary agent.
Query Package – Feedback on a cover letter, synopsis and the first 50 pages (or 10,000 words) of a manuscript. Critiques will be a minimum of 1000 words of overall feedback, as well as line edits and comments on the documents. I will also read the edited query when it is complete to provide any final notes before agent submission. £115/$152
Full Manuscript Package – Feedback on a cover letter, synopsis and full manuscript. Critiques will be a minimum of 2500 words and will include a mix of line edits and comments on the documents, and a letter of overall feedback.* I will also read the edited manuscript when it is complete to provide any final notes before agent submission. £3.50/$4.50 per thousand words of manuscript, or £150 for works shorter than 40,000 words (excludes word count of cover letter and synopsis).
*This is the best choice if you are willing to invest a lot of time into editing the manuscript to make it the best it can possibly be. If you aren’t able to commit to that level of work, I suggest the line edit package below.
Line Edit Package – An in-depth sentence-by-sentence edit of the manuscript, correcting edits and bringing up the prose to the best standard it can be. This edit will make only minor suggestions for changes to character motivations, scene choices and plot points. It will mainly focus on improving what has already been written. £7.50/$9.50 per thousand words of manuscript
Scientific proof-reading (For publishers) – Proofreading and fact-checking of scientific and mathematical diagrams, facts, calculations and equations in Children’s or Adult Science Non-Fiction. Qualifications – First Class MSci in Natural Sciences, specialising in Chemistry and Physics. Previous clients – Walker Books. £22/hour
Email me at email@example.com for more information. You can purchase a critique through Etsy here if you wish, or email me directly. I am currently fully booked for editorial critiques for the next month, but I can add you to the waiting list.
Critiques will be sent back within 4 weeks of payment. Manuscripts must be sent as a Microsoft Word document. Payment is taken by PayPal or via Etsy on acceptance of the manuscript. An invoice will be provided. Refunds available upon cancellation, providing the work has not yet been completed. I reserve the right to refuse applications due to time restrictions.
My experience: I have written 6 novels and 3 novellas, all of which have been published traditionally in the United Kingdom, USA and Australia. My work has also been translated into 5 languages worldwide. I am a career novelist and make a living wage from my writing.
“Lauren is my first port of call for all my works-in-progress. She has a keen eye for errors and inconsistencies and has made some phenomenal suggestions for improvement, while completely understanding and respecting my own vision.”
Alice Oseman, YA author of Radio Silence and Solitaire and creator of webcomic HEARTSTOPPER.
“Comprehensive feedback, well thought-out comments, and just the right balance between praise and criticism.”
Lucy Saxon, YA fantasy author of The Tellus Series, including Take Back the Skies, The Almost King and The City Bleeds Gold.
“Lauren provides extremely helpful feedback to a high standard and is someone I really trust with my work.”
Kate Ormand, YA author of Dark Days and shape-shifter circus series, The Wanderers and The Pack. The Wanderers was honored as “Winner” in the “Fiction: Young Adult” category of the 2015 USA Best Book Awards.
“I was excited to have my critique edited by Lauren James! With her stellar advice I was able to get recognised! I trust her with my work.”
Alexandra Perchanidou, Blogger/Author of THREE GHOSTS FOR ANASTASIA
Having Lauren James critique my work was an incredibly helpful experience. She offered great ideas for improvements and was really positive and encouraging about my chapters, and as such I feel so much more confident about moving forward with edits!
Sarah Corrigan, Blogger & Aspiring author
Lauren’s services have been invaluable – I’d been stuck in a cycle of rejections and knew I needed a professional eye to help. Lauren is very fast, efficient and kind which is what you need when sharing your creative work. She’s always there for follow up questions despite her busy schedule. If you’re not sure what to do next with your manuscript, Lauren will have the answer!
Shelley Bartup, Aspiring author
Lauren really helped me shake up stagnant parts of my manuscript that had largely remained in the same format since the first draft. I was unsure of what to do to improve them, but Lauren’s keen editor’s eye and compassion helped me to understand what would work best for my characters.
From using Lauren’s services I have a newfound confidence in my writing abilities and a determination to keep improving my manuscripts. I cannot recommend her enough!
Georgia Campbell, Aspiring author
I’m a huge fan of Lauren’s writing so I was excited to find out that she offers an editorial service. Her report and comments on the manuscript were incredibly detailed and insightful. It’s really useful to get a fresh perspective from someone so knowledgeable and with a proven track record. I’ve since got an agent and will soon be going on submission to publishers.
Amy McCaw, Aspiring author
I can’t recommend Lauren’s editorial services highly enough. Besides her obvious credentials as a successful writer, she is also a talented editor. The feedback she provided on my opening chapters, as well as my book proposal, was not only brilliantly insightful but also super speedy, supportive and great value for money. She is everything your manuscript needs.
Lorna Riley, Aspiring author
After floundering about in a state of writerly anxiety, I knew it was time for my manuscript to be read by someone other than myself and my dog. Lauren has since proved to be completely invaluable. Her thoughtful comments and brilliant feedback left me nodding at my computer; eager to get the next draft underway. Her kindness, efficiency and keen-eye are just what your work-in-progress needs!
Blake Polden, Aspiring author
It’s difficult enough as a writer to share your work with your friends but asking a writer whose work you absolutely love is mildly terrifying. I’m pleased to say that Lauren quickly put me at ease with her helpful mix of positive and constructive feedback. She reminded me of all those things I loved about my stories but helpfully pointed out where the plot wasn’t quite working and challenged me to think the story through. Not only that but she was efficient and exceptionally encouraging, coming back to check how I was progressing with my edits. As a result I had lots of positive feedback describing my manuscript as polished and well written, Lauren has played a vital role in helping me feel confident to query.
Jo Clarke, Aspiring author
Lauren’s editorial eye is superb and her suggestions on changes for my manuscript and query were insightful and spot-on. Her critique gave me the confidence to continue writing LGBTQ stories with complex, realistic, characters – and her knowledge of the YA market is invaluable! Lauren showed a deep understanding of what I was hoping to achieve with my manuscript and working with her was an absolute joy that I would recommend to any aspiring author. With Lauren’s guidance I have received some good feedback from agents on my submission and hope to further this success in the future.
Jen Gallagher, Aspiring author